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More excellent writing, Johnathan. Pile on the forces of antagonism for our hapless anti-heroine. I like it.

You've clearly done a lot of hard work on this, especially on the actual stylistics of the writing, and it really shows. All your sentences and word-choices appear deeply thought out. The pacing is perfect too (I'm glad you told us how long the whole thing is, btw, in that respect - it is a mistake I may have made with my serial, which I shall be correcting soon).

It is she going to experience any bends, though?

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Thanks, Evie. This is all great to hear. The text has indeed been through just a few edits. Others have also commented on the story's 'beats' having a good rhythm.

Interesting how you call the protagonist an "anti-heroine". I kind of like that, as she doesn't see herself as a hero in the slightest. One of the 'theme tunes' I played when writing her later chapters is based on that premise. It will be flagged as a future 'suggested music' track.

To answer your question: 'the bends' will soon be the least of everyone's problems...

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