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Evelyn K. Brunswick's avatar

More excellent writing, Johnathan. Pile on the forces of antagonism for our hapless anti-heroine. I like it.

You've clearly done a lot of hard work on this, especially on the actual stylistics of the writing, and it really shows. All your sentences and word-choices appear deeply thought out. The pacing is perfect too (I'm glad you told us how long the whole thing is, btw, in that respect - it is a mistake I may have made with my serial, which I shall be correcting soon).

It is she going to experience any bends, though?

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